This is a really thoughtfull piece. I really like it and thats saying alot seeing as I usually get bored three words into anything Sci-Fi

I cant wait to see what happens next. Very well written

The story has very interesting concepts... I am curious to see how this story turns out, and whether there will be an all out war between the two sides of America due to the (attempted) assassination of the Eastern president... and how the "ice" will play into this.

This is so obliviously comical that I can hardly stop laughing. I hope my complete disrespect for this pitiful attempt at political science fiction isn't taken too harshly. But come on, homosexuals taking the fiftieth state? For themselves? Their passivity is surpassed only by that of Asian females. In a technical aspect, your writing is too choppy and you expose too much at one time. If you're going to write a novel about an established nation splitting in two (for the second time), then you should build up to that instead of blabbing it in the ever-so-short prologue and losing every chance of a good climactic battle (figurative or actual). Your expository talents need work.

This is a very interesting and unique story. You need to work on your comma usage: often you have no commas where they should be, or have commas instead of semicolons. You should try using a grammar checker. Also, you should try to stay in the same tense throughout the piece, the only way to check for this is to go over it before you post it. It is a very common mistake in prose, and completely understandable.

There are many more things I could say: I could point out the ridiculousness of your criticism of grammar in poetry while yours lacks in prose, I could makes comments about the feasibility of your story and how it is obviously homophobic, or I could make various comments about your maturity and reproductive organ size. However, I have no desire to stoop to your level. I have no interest in the drama you are trying to create, nor do I believe there is any point in participating in it. Your reviews to my work only show that you cannot properly read poetry. I am very sorry for you, and I forgive you your trespasses.