Love it.

"We had dreams once, but the world stepped in
We began to believe that hope was a sin"

Favourite lines. Very well written. And thanks for the reviews on my story.

I liked the repetition and the theme. I like..."sands of time" in general. Just the phrase is pretty. Sparkling sands in an endless desert. Gah. Here I go again. :-P

What a great poem. I find that I prefer rhyming poetry, and I like that you combine different styles of rhyming patterns. It also has a great story behind it that I really can appreciate. Nice job.

this was good i like

This is great!

I like the transformation from hopeless to hopeful.

Gret Job!

great peice, i really relate to it right now, and i loved the way you wrote it, thank you for sharing