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| biminator 2006-07-26 ch 14,  | abuseHmm. Well, I liked how Zimri gets that little "I-told-you-so" moment, that was rather amusing. I also liked the part where Rowen is manipulating the guy. Too bad about Hale, though, I always liked him. update soon. |
| biminator 2006-07-20 ch 13, | abuseooh, exciting. Phoenix and Rowen escape only to have her ruin in by running into one of the Axis higher-ups. Luckily, she knows they know where she and Phoenix are, so perhaps they can still get away. anyways, update soon. |
| biminator 2006-07-07 ch 12, | abuseI think you're losing me. Maybe it's just that I watched "Memento" earlier (which is the most confusing movie ever concieved), and my brain is melted, but I've kinda lost where you were going with this whole thing. I think I'll sit on it for a few days, then go back and read through a few chapters. |
| biminator 2006-04-10 ch 10, | abuseahh, nice to see Hale once again. One thing that I didn't pick up, though, was where Phoenix and "Diana" were going after arriving in First Quarter. I suppose you can tell me next time we cross paths on AIM. update soon. |
| biminator 2005-10-24 ch 9, | abusethrilling chapter. really very nice. it intensified my vivid imagining of the story greatly, adding to the feel of "Wow, this would make a great movie." Except, of course, you'd have to have a nice high rating... |
| biminator 2005-09-13 ch 8, | abusefascinating, as always. I like the imagery of Hale sticking out like he never had before. good job, and update soon. |
| biminator 2005-07-08 ch 7, | abusefascinating. I'm glad you went back to Hale, he seemed a little left out. Plus, he's fun to read. Rowen's insanity was intricate and vivid. I also liked the way you wrote Phoenix's reactions to Ro. update soon. |
| biminator 2005-06-12 ch 6, | abusedamn. too bad for Rowen. very well done. it's impossible to stop reading once I start, and for something this long, that's quite a feat. update soon. |
| Stormcat2002 2005-05-21 ch 1, | abuseOh my god... Have you actually written a novel? Have you published one? Because this first chapter is filled with so much profound vocabularies with words that describe the world in your story so vividly, that I was totally drawn into it subconsciously. I'll read it again in more detail later on. Keep up the great work! |
| biminator 2005-04-25 ch 4, | abusevery nice, very nice. The environments are vivid, and the characters are well-described. The plot is nicely developed, and the characters are well-polished. I enjoy Hale and Phoenix the most. update soon. |