Hmm. Well, I liked how Zimri gets that little "I-told-you-so" moment, that was rather amusing. I also liked the part where Rowen is manipulating the guy. Too bad about Hale, though, I always liked him. update soon.

ooh, exciting. Phoenix and Rowen escape only to have her ruin in by running into one of the Axis higher-ups. Luckily, she knows they know where she and Phoenix are, so perhaps they can still get away. anyways, update soon.

I think you're losing me. Maybe it's just that I watched "Memento" earlier (which is the most confusing movie ever concieved), and my brain is melted, but I've kinda lost where you were going with this whole thing. I think I'll sit on it for a few days, then go back and read through a few chapters.

ahh, nice to see Hale once again. One thing that I didn't pick up, though, was where Phoenix and "Diana" were going after arriving in First Quarter. I suppose you can tell me next time we cross paths on AIM. update soon.

thrilling chapter. really very nice. it intensified my vivid imagining of the story greatly, adding to the feel of "Wow, this would make a great movie." Except, of course, you'd have to have a nice high rating...

fascinating, as always. I like the imagery of Hale sticking out like he never had before. good job, and update soon.

fascinating. I'm glad you went back to Hale, he seemed a little left out. Plus, he's fun to read. Rowen's insanity was intricate and vivid. I also liked the way you wrote Phoenix's reactions to Ro. update soon.

damn. too bad for Rowen. very well done. it's impossible to stop reading once I start, and for something this long, that's quite a feat. update soon.

Oh my god... Have you actually written a novel? Have you published one? Because this first chapter is filled with so much profound vocabularies with words that describe the world in your story so vividly, that I was totally drawn into it subconsciously.

I'll read it again in more detail later on. Keep up the great work!

very nice, very nice. The environments are vivid, and the characters are well-described. The plot is nicely developed, and the characters are well-polished. I enjoy Hale and Phoenix the most. update soon.