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| emundee 2005-07-08 ch 1,  | abuseI like how your spaced out this poem, it sets a very suitable tone. The last two lines you wrote made me smile, because I think its an awesome thing that you can assess your surroundings, and like most of us, find yourself suffocated in some way, yet still maintain a happiness because you are aware of a more significant and worldly pursuits ("the dream"). |
| fren chi 2005-02-20 ch 1, | abuseit didnt seem like a downer to me, its good and different |
| Dave The Fool 2005-02-19 ch 1, | abusenice this works really well. good one |
| xHannahx 2005-02-19 ch 1, | abusethe last two lines ring so true. monday should be interesting... nice flow, cya soon, Han. |
| LiKePiNk 2005-02-19 ch 1, | abuseO this is amazing! Life, so complexPerplexedConstantly, by its nature I absolutely loved that line. Great poem in all! ~LP~ |
| StormyWings 2005-02-19 ch 1, | abuseI love the end: "I am confused, but I am happy."It's wonderful, a good read.Keep writing. |
| Glanners 2005-02-19 ch 1, | abusegood for u man. do not feel guilt,life is always comlicated, i have a poem to prove it! live the dream! luv u loads,Glanners |