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| Nature's Glory 2007-06-25 ch 1,   | Figured I'd get a quick review in before i left to go see how my newborn nephy is. I really like the style, it had a freedom but with its own...edge? I'm not good with finding the right words -.- This makes me curious about your father, what could have made you make such an effective poem, I wonder... The last stanza really caught my eye - and ill carry, and ill carry, and ill curry favor in your eyes... - hm... |
| Searon 2005-10-19 ch 1, | Coolness, keep up the good work. |
| Saint Sade 2005-05-08 ch 1, | I really liked this piece. good work! |
| Jack Milo 2005-04-08 ch 1, | wow. there's alot of emotion in this poem. I dont quite understand it, but it wants to make me cry for some reason. |
| Alex-Blake 2005-03-17 ch 1, | Hello dearie I like this, i think you got a ver simple idea and turned it into something vivid. However I think it has a ** title 'Serarted edges?" think of something less cliche and maybe this will be worth reading. Alex p.s dont ever ** call me kiddo again... |
| Nikolomagne 2005-02-24 ch 1, | Woah - I sometimes get that feeling when I look at some of my parent's childhood photos - I'm like... that's what they looked like? That's what they did? Sometimes the two don't add together. I like the double meaning of serrated edges... very good. ^_^ Yoku dekimashita. ~Nico |
| o0oAnnie 2005-02-24 ch 1, | Very interesting poem...I've never really read anything like it...the symbolism in it was great and the ideas and images presented were very conflicted, haunting and surprising...the repition of "Serrated edges" at the end of each stanza really adds to the haunting feeling as well...keep writing! :) |
| misanthropic muse 2005-02-24 ch 1, | i really like this poem. it is very... haunting? and desolate? and eerie?no, i think desolate is the best wordbecause the people/person talking are isolated in their own pain... |
| jelie36 2005-02-21 ch 1, | This is amazing and beautiful. I love the symbolism...Just wonderful, you should write more poetry!! Keep this up!! -jelie36- |
| Innocent Harbinger of Doom 2005-02-19 ch 1, | This made me feel like it was spinning me around in circles. Very cool. It--oh, this'll sound weird, but I'm going to say it anyway--it seems to have a face. Does that make any sense? Anyway, awesome piece. |
| Dying Without Gackt 2005-02-19 ch 1, | That was good...in a weird way. It was very unique - u should write more poetry. |