Hmm, very interesting. I like all the food analogies. Didn't make me hungry, though, haha. I like the sudden turn, from "I could consume you heartily" to "If.."

"You refuse to serve your purpose" this line perplexes me... are you saying that this peron's purpose is to serve your wanting heart - it's a selfish frustration. I dunno. It leaves enough intrigue to make me think about it after I'm done reading it.

Is Aerod a food, though? Maybe we don't have it here.

-Jesse
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Awesome poem.

~Twilight Starr~

:grins: oh the irony. i liked how it the subject of the poem was compared to food. good job.

EB

now I want to eat! *looks at stomach* oh damn.

hey!well, what can i say...interesting. I assume it's an extended metaphor? though mb ur just were just obsessed with food (like me) at the time?also - STORMER! long time no see. sorry - ive not been on here in a while! maybe i should attepmt the writing again...i'll try and read something longer sometime - but exams atm (argh!) and also i need sleep right now.promise(ish) to review better another time!!molzi x

Heh, sorry it took so long. I was actually going to read Viscious Circle, but I read the desc and it seemed so familiar that I checked the reviews and found out I hit that one like 9 months ago and it stuck with me this long ;P

This poem rocks, though I can't decide whether I should be hungry or horny, haha. The last line completely changes the feel of the entire piece, and I think it's, at the very least, admirable when a poet is capable of such emotional manipulation. I love how you refer to "strands of angel hair". Even though it doesn't quite seem to fit in with the food references, I believe there is angel hair pasta, is there not? Anyhow, awesome poem (2003, eh?), keep it up ;P

You're not helping my diet at all... :)

Loved the title.

you're not the only one. it's like an eight course meal.there's something romantic about being called a beautifully fried egg.i like this!