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| Crizel 2005-02-21 ch 1,  | abuseI love how you captured him in names towards the end of the poem. I love how you say that he is the same, whether he was at home or in the hospital; how he had the same beautiful mind. Wonderful Job. A word of advice though, you don't need a comma every time you start a new line. I like the thought of pausing at every line though, perhaps it was intentional ...? Marvelous job, anyway! |