Completely awesome. Yay.

The second verse was my favorite as well as the line: "Vomit-esque/DISGUST". This was truely amazing, my love.

OMFG! This is awesome.

Wow. I luved this. Very, very well written. Though I'm not a fan of using the f word in poetry, just because it doesn't seem very classy...but here you used it well and appropriately. I'm going to add this to my favroites :)