I'm returning the favor!

"-of carefully tailored soliloquiesoccupy this space between us."--This might be better as "occupying"--

"We walk shoulder with apart,"--I think you meant "width"?--

Yeah, the spacing got a litte distracting. You can actually fix this my holding in ctrl (or is it shift?) when hitting enter.

Overall, I liked this. I think you pretty much broke the cliché with the overall length and depth of the poem.

whoa... that was excellent! so..ok i had to read it over but i get it and i love it and great work! ..i really enjoyed the formatting... it made it a million times more interesting and effective ^_^

I'm sorry to read this, but it's a wonderful piece of poetry none the less. "drowning in truth" I love it. Its nice reading some really good poetry after my recent rejects.sigh and walk on oh Queen of Poetry, Prose, and Imagery.

at first, with the weird spacing, it was nearly like two different poems next to each other.

0_o, t3h spacing made me kinda dizzy.I love this, it reminds me of a quiet day, where you don't do anything but just contemplate about life. You are an AWESOME writer, please keep writing. -ADD

Whoa.That imagery was amazing...you're vair vair talented!I love this poem!!-Stella

whoa. that's crazy spacing haha. oh well, doesn't take away from the angsty perfection. ^^ hehe. kinda made me all depressed now haha. oh well, just one thing... rated G? nyuu. ^^

kakyou.

as always, impressed and inspired.