Haha fantastic story!

xx

what a sweet story!

I feel like you may have rushed it in parts with more telling than showing, and there was the purple prose at the very start that was somewhat noticeable (which, I suppose, was too MUCH showing?).

Nevertheless, you pulled through and for the majority of the time your prose was natural and clear, and I had a good image in my head of what was going on. This is one of the better stories I've read on this site, to be honest. I think it was a good gesture how you didn't have her accept the proposal right away; it shows good sense.

I think you've done a lovely job! good work :)

haha, one track mind with the candy, those girls have.

oh my! I think that was mostly Dan's fault for not giving a heads up...

it's going wonderfully so far! can't wait to read more :) hope it all ends well.

what a lovely story! you had a bit too much purple prose at the start, but you got me by the end. I can't wait to read more.

very good story!! =D i love reading stories that are well developed and just great!!

Thanks so much!

Aww! That was way aweseome! Great job!

I "might" if ...introduces herself!


hehehe!


I like Andrew... do set him up with someone nice won't you

Mariah...

Your pots boiling over.

No!

That is quite possibly the most endering thing I've seen er read all week!

Yuck! I hope I never get proposed to like that!

Aw

This is soo cute!

IT's like a shorter Jane Eyre

hehehe!

I like her!