if there was a better word for Brilliant, then I would thrown it at you. hmm, radiant maybe? Somehow that doesn't seem to fit properly.

Mysterious and emotional. Gritty and real, smooth rhyming and all.

First I love the title of the second section.. nice. Anyway. I like this poem, its real good, and the structure, is it one you've heard of and chose to base it on, or did u just chose to pursue the 3 seperate topics in each stanza? Because I've heard of poetry structures, and when I do I sometimes like to write in that style, I just wondered if you've done the same here.

Personally, on writing poems, I've really gone off writing in rhyme, I don't know why. And sadly I have a huge case of writer's block at the moment. But this is really good, I like it!

This is really cool, I love how it can actually be read straight or subject-wise. And as for the explanation, I think they're always a good thing to have, especially when something is so open to interpretation as this is. It isn't lack of imagination-- I had many ideas in my mind as I read this. But when I read the note it was clear what was intended. Just be sure to add it at the end so the reader can see first, and then learn the intention.

I really like the theme in this one. The composition is odd, though; for you, at least. I never like rhyming when it seems forced, and it feels that way in this piece. Also: never ever add an explanation to a poem. If people don't understand it, that's their fault; if they lack imagination, they shouldn't be reading poetry.