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| Safira 2005-12-11 ch 1,  | abuseI must admit when reading the first few paragraphs I did find this piece a bit confusing. However, now that I have finished it I have two words for you: witty and humorous! I am pretty sure that those who have read this were stunned by the twist. In fact, I actually re-read the whole piece laughing at the clues and how you chose to phrase certain events.Take for example, “in short, you ate up one hell of a record-size assignment” - =D I liked the way your words flowed as well as the imagery provided. As a side note, I do find a talking toilet quite unnerving o.O Nevertheless, I really appreciate this because it made me smile and laugh and I love doing that! Cheers – Autumn. |
| rachelalyssa 2005-05-12 ch 1, | abuseI'd like to take this moment to declair that you are my hero. I found this through your profile, which I found through one of your awesome reviews of somebody else's attempt at fiction. I love your style, and the way you embeded subtle clues without giving away the ending. I had to stop and read this over about three times! I'm amazed, and now find myself tempted by an irrestible urge to read every single thing you've got posted! -Rachel |
| Sharakinpaix 2005-03-30 ch 1, | abuseI love how vivid yet concise your descriptions are. "He crisply clicked his shining black heels..." What a twist! The first clue that tipped me off didn't come until the word "bowl." But when I read it over, clues were everywhere! How cool! "Your targets were held and eliminated without deviation..." Hahaha! Well done, Leonard! BTW thank you for your kind reviews! I really appreciate it! |
| shadowpaharoh 2005-03-14 ch 1, anon. | abusemake no sense, **. leav I-Luv-Mosquiton alone. you don't have to be a priss because you don't like the topics. and fyi, the 9-year-old as the permission to do whatever the ** she wants. LAY OFF, **! |
| Lowell Boston 2005-03-10 ch 1, | abuseThat was great! A perfect, laser sharp ending. It reads completely different the second time allowing the reader to see the obvious in hindsight. Excellent story. Thanks for posting. Lowell |
| wordsworth in a garbage can 2005-02-23 ch 1, | abuseI liked this one- it sort of did make sense, the more and more I reread it. Regardless, I enjoyed it. You're a good writer, and this particular style of this piece reminded me of Chuck Palahuniak (sp?) meets Ray Bradbury. Loved the callousness, really loved that factor. And the names! I enjoy your sense of humor. |
| Braddie 2005-02-22 ch 1, | abuseOh dude... *chuckles* |