Ahem, getting to the poem. First off, I love your pen name! It made me really want to read your poem.

You have interesting outlook on life. I think this poem reminds me of the one I wrote called My World. You could take a look at that if you want...not that it's better than your poem of course. mere doggerel compared to your poem! I like this uneven rhythm. It makes the poem all the more unique although i would have changed it so that line 7 would read: The tales of the old.

Mainly because that would also refer to the ancients who are supposedly old and wise. Ahem, but I digress. Anyways, I love the last four lines of your poem.

They closed your poem up well and they were excellent in rhyming scheme and rhythm. They also had excellent pentameter. You show great promise, and although you are young, your words express a type of wisdom not common in many of your peers. I wish you good luck in your future works.

Hoping you continue writing,

*Orient Fox*