i happen to have a n obsession w/ vampires and u have one of the best vamp poems i have ever read.

cool.

O.O Wow. You took something as cliched as a vampie and added a completely new twist to it. Smart!

One thing:

In "A nod from me as I stare, captivated by this being," you said "stare" which doesn't match the past tense of the rest of the poem. Maybe "I gave a nod as I stared, captivated by this being"?

Also, your word choice really stresses the emotions and makes the reader feel as if he/she is there. Keep up the great work!