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| Fetus Fairydust 2006-07-30 ch 1,  | abuseIf you add to this one and screw it up... I'll disown you... Just Kidding... I don't think you can ruin a story... |
| braindead1345 2006-04-21 ch 1, | abuseShort, but awesome. Cant think of any improvments...it goes on my favs! |
| Instant Ninja 2006-01-22 ch 1, | abuse...nice story...a bit short, though... |
| BlackRibbon 2005-05-22 ch 1, | abuseI'm getting obsessed with short stories, is that bad? Good work by the way! |
| Shelby Strong 2005-05-16 ch 1, anon. | abuseI like it and hope that you make more. It was not hurried but set at a good pace. I'm a big fan! |
| slave to the voices 2005-04-01 ch 1, | abuseI think this is perfect the way it is. If you were to add to it, it might take away some intensity. However, if you did want to add more, you might want to think about what led up to this night. Write about the stalker and what led to his obsession or give a detailed description of the girl in the mirror. Anyway, nice work, keep writing. **Slave** |
| Xavier Everett 2005-02-26 ch 1, | abuseOne: thanks for your review of my story. Two: I thought "Mirror of Sin" was excellent. You may think it needs lengthening, but with some stories you can say all you want to in so little space, and "Mirror of Sin" is one of those. It's got an interesting rhythm to it. I particularly like the way that while he's obsessed with his mirror and himself and she hates him for that, she's equally obsessed with him and doesn't realise it. One thing: I think this might have actually gone better if set out like a poem. It has that rhythm which seems to demand transcription to verse. Just a thought. But everything else is pure excellence. |
| I-e-m-s 2005-02-26 ch 1, | abuseO! Nice story! I don't think you need to change anything actually!It was a bit short but nice! ^_^ |
| aeria-liko 2005-02-22 ch 1, | abusethis is well done- although, is the narrator echo the nympth who kills him? (it is said she fell for him) but i do really like this, for a very short story- poetic and beautiful in sadness.do most of your stories have greek mythology intwined in them? if so, great idea to get people interested, nowadays you just dont see stories like this anymoreaeria-liko |