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Written 2008-03-12 ch 1,	abusefabulous start. You hooked me right at the first sentence. I like how subtly you show us that she has powers with flowers (that rhymes!) and plants and things. I've also had an experience like that, though it was less fantastic but still kidnapish... I just made up a word. But you know, where you almost trust an adult but then you're like... no. Years ago, obviously. Seeing as how I'm an adult now... Sorry, I ramble a lot. bad habit. Oh my gosh, the end made me really sad. I can't even imagine how terrible it would be if everyone just forgot about me. Great start, though. I love the modern setting; very cool. Take care and keep writing. It's time for me to go to bed!
Equilibrium 2008-01-09 ch 3,	abuseWow. I think i understand what you meant in your review about being concise after reading this. I love the realism of this story, and the way you portrayed Olivia's emotions in the first chapter was awesome. I especially liked her reaction to the phone call to her mother. Brilliant. And GAH, the suspence! Ending off with the mysterious letter in chapter 3 was a great touch. I can't wait to read more!
Luny Loona 2007-10-09 ch 3,	abuseI loved the ending! I'm glad there's someone to help her. Is it the weird boy she met on the bus? Or is it Lucky? Update!
Luny Loona 2007-10-08 ch 1,	abuseYour first sentence already told me that I will keep reading. 'But Olivia was eleven, wasn't that old enough to decide who was dangerous and who wasn't?'...colon instead of comma. That's a nice start! I liked it.
Ms Urania 2007-03-29 ch 3,	abuseOK, I just read this for the first time as I'm desperate for some writng from you (specially a new chapter on Roanoke hint hint). I now find myself very intrigued which is a shame as you're not going to update. I'm off to read the updated version now...
Sari La Elfa 2007-01-18 ch 3,	abusehey! what a cliff! pleease update!! i'm loving it..
Infinite Abyss 2006-09-02 ch 3,	abuseI really like this story. The plot is interesting. I notice it's been a while since you updated though. Please add the next chapter soon.
Vohn Exel 2006-05-09 ch 3,	abuseWow, I really like it. You write alot better then I do, and I have to admit that I find the Mrs. Cadby person very interesting. So much so that I'd like to set her against one or two of my characters, lol. I'm looking forward to more chapters, hopefully one involving Olivia getting her sweet revenge :D.
Tikvah Ariel 2006-01-11 ch 3,	abuseA mysterious note? Not the direction I had anticipated, but I suppose that this story will be more about her escape and kidnapping then her actual emotional struggle and using of magic. I just hadn't thought she'd have a friend. Its interesting, but not the kind of story I normally enjoy so I don't think that I'll read on. Your grammar and spelling are excellent though, but I don't feel like your Main Character has much personalitly.
Tikvah Ariel 2006-01-11 ch 1,	abuseInteresting, I love how your character isn't smart enough not to get in a car with a stranger, but she does have powers. I'm tired of seeing the super intelligent little children with magical powers. I also commend you on writing about someone not your age. The concept of someone disapeering obviously isn't new, but I like how you are telling it from the side of the one who vanished. It should be interesting, and you have a fairly nice writing style though sometimes it is easy to lose attention.
D L Dzioba 2005-09-03 ch 3,	abuseOh my gosh, you've got to update this soon. I must know what happens next.
D L Dzioba 2005-09-03 ch 2,	abuseWow, It's been a while Since I've reviewed you. This story is going very well.
Mourner of the Colossi 2005-07-23 ch 1,	abusei became interested in this story because the girl shares the same name with me (Olivia), only i'm thirteen. cool story. i feel bad for her. that would be creepy if that ever happened to me. read the rest later. sorry, but i still luv this story! this is on my faves!
The Ladies 2005-07-22 ch 1,	abuseI like how you turned a very plausible situation into something quite unique. Wow, the twist about how the mother no longer recognizes her child! SCARY Plus, if Mrs. Cadby is so powerful as to delete memories, then why can't she just do what she wants without Olivia's help? What does keeping the flower alive mean?
Casey C 2005-04-03 ch 3,	abuseHey, Narc! I looking for something to read and Somewhere Home looked like a good choice smiles Great work so far! I'm loving it, had to start at the cliffhanger chapter though laughs I like Olivia's reaction to everything and the way you've protrayed Mrs. Cadby. Is Greasy-Hair ever going to get a name?? I want to know how her magic has changed, I liked how you made that comment about the grass singing. Great work and I can't wait to see what happens next!

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