The purpose of this piece...isn't for hte reader to feel pity...you just wnat to see how much the reader knows about you? Were you expecting essays as reviews, a quiz perhaps, later on? No, I'm just messing with you. Let's straighten some things out though. 'I've' is not spelt 'iv'. If you want to be a writer, you have to know at least basic spelling. Also, the tenses in this piece you muss up a lot. And sometimes repeating lines can close the flow, like "Did you know iv had friends see me spit up bloodBut non know that just about every night I spit up blood?"(non, I'm assuming is none)This piece holds a lot of blunt emotion, and I feel pity for you...though I know you don't want it. I don't find this piece beautiful, I find it coarse. You have raw emotion, harness it. Good view, nice emotion, but since you've suffered through so much...phrase it in a lovely way. People see this as beautiful only because it's so blunt. It's harsh and terrible, but I think formatting is the best way to go. Nice job all the same, keep it up.

wow...freakin awesome

I found your page when you left a review on one of mine. I can't really say much about this one since I'm a new reader. If I wasn't a new reader I dont think I could say much anyway. You got rare talent.

Wonderful poem. Very well done, yet sad. Thank you for your review.

many people believe me to be one thing while i am indeed another thing all together, tho it is not just the readers who percieve me this way but in fact all people that i know. This includes my friends and my family. none of them have ever known how certain things in my life effected me. like you i have seen a parent cheat, tho it was my mother, and this has lead to a deep distrust in relaionships, so i must tell you, this is a very moving piece of work at least to me, thank you for the strenght for writing this, i only wished i was able to do the same and not be as criptic in my own writing... thank you for the insight into your world, although i hope it isnt always as bleck as you have made it out to be...Always and foreverKarlaMarie

I love this, not because it's dark or anything. I love it because I wrote a story just like this. I entered it in one of those poetry contests. I was disqualified because the line " Can you remind me how many times I released the pain? I'm sure my legs kept track" did not seem appropriate. What a bunch of crap! Love your writing. Loyal Reader, Miss QuackQuack ( Brittney)

Aww..This is so sad and beautiful. You have a gift to be able to make poetry like this. Is all this true? Sorry you don't have to answer.

very good I like it very deep

what a powerful poem...i can relate to some of those questions (i know that you didn't want to know that) but i just wanted to let you know that your not alone in this world. there will always be another that can relate to you. it is hard to trust people..i have known that all to well. life is never easy but when you can deal with it then it might become a blessing. may you try with all your might to complete this life without truly hating anyone..but forgiving them.

Oh gosh is this really true? This is justy so... horrible! I mean your life seems so sad and depressing and... Ok, sorry I should be tryin to cheer you up. Try to find the bright side of things, if there ever is a bright side. If not, well I don't know. I'll pray for you, k? All in all this was a very good poem. Terribly sad, but still nicely written. I love your purpose for writing it. Asking how much your readers or really how much the world really knows about you. Excellent work with this and may God Bless!

im not going to pretend that i have something to say that is really worth saying because i honestly dont i mean i am purely an amateaur its obvious in my writing but you are a talent which is really a rare thing. my only hope is that even if you just take one glance at this review and look away leaving it behind with the million others you will know that at this moment whoever wherever you are that right now when i have just gone and cowered in the corner after antoher fight with the mom you gave me hope and express what i feel right now in the bottom of my miserable life and that no matter how different we or our situations may be the fact that i dont know anything about you is the greatest fact at all because by not knowing i know the most of all.

i can't help it! i know people don't like pity, because i don't either, but i can't help but feel a bit...well maybe a lot...of remorse for you! i'm sorry if you don't like it... but i did like your poem and how you structured it! and i'll answer you on your question "I just wanted to know how much the readers knew about me." i don't know any thing about you, but you have great potential, we all do! so keep writting! and smile. great job

Dam, thats good, really really good, really really really good. I love the ryhme, you use it so well. This is superb, honestly, really brilliant. (God, i'm overusing really!)

this goes to show how much i don't know you i guess.. you portray your anger here very well.. it's practically radiating off my screen.. anyweys.. good job..:)

You're an amazing writer...and I'm sorry you need to deal with this stuff...hope it all works out for what it's worth...Keep writing ^_^--pammy-