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| Lovedward48 2008-02-24 ch 1, anon. | abuseI love it!! I think it's sad and really thoughtful. |
| Isidris Gry 2008-02-10 ch 1,  | abusePretty. The imagery is lovely. |
| Lady E 2007-01-21 ch 1, | abuseSimplistic and powerful. A very beautiful rendition on change. |
| Panicking With Hesitation 2006-09-05 ch 1, | abusecute |
| raelia 2006-04-14 ch 1, anon. | abusei know this feeling. |
| bittersweet suicide 2006-01-22 ch 1, | abuseI have a poem called this. but its not the same really |
| PirateGrrl 2005-02-26 ch 1, | abuseThis is beautiful |
| Spawn of Hell 2005-02-24 ch 1, | abusehey thats pretty good... love the last two verses... i like your poem... short... but the is a feeling of suspension... like a moment of hesitation before everything is let loose... a calm soothing feeling tinged with some anxiousness, maybe a bit of dread; as if on the edge of something important... i dunno if you get what i mean. maybe im not making much sense... well no matter. : ) i liked it. |
| DustyInvasion 2005-02-23 ch 1, | abuseShort and bittersweet. Holding within it the fear that rests inside many individuals. The fear that things will never be the same, that one choice may destroy everything they once had and then what lies after their choice becomes less appealing than the first glance had made it. But the last two lines possess the hope that we all cling onto so desperately, the hope that everything will turn out fine and everything will be as it always was. The comparison of butterfly wings and the time before change occurs in life, only helps to portray the fragility of ones’ own life before change. How, no matter what one wishes, change may not always be good and can even destroy the happiness that was once given easily. Or do a complete turn around and grant someone a ray of light in midst a dismal world. The imagery of the poem depicted each emotion so wonderfully. ‘Kissing butterfly wings’ - brings forth the image of an act so sweet and delicate, that it should be treasured before all else. ‘Broken and burned’ - drawing the image of irrevocability and desolation when all that should be is not as one left it. ‘Or if they’ll still flutter’ - a cautious hope that all will continue on as before, relating so closely with the deliberate but frail beat of a butterfly’s wings. Typo gone, so there’s nothing to be said about the spelling or grammar. Free verse works well with the poem, bringing about a touch of spontaneity that only furthermore relates to changes’ own impulsiveness. On a whole it was a beautiful poem, that was able to pull forth the fears of many and paint them to words. ~DI |
| fbarlolken 2005-02-23 ch 1, | abuseOh... great imagry. |
| Arigazi 2005-02-23 ch 1, | abuseOMG! How hilarious, I was JUST thinking of butterflies, then here I find your story. *smile*Uh, I think you meant to say "like", not "life" in the last line of the poem.*sends cookies and love**smooch* |