Nice job, Ash-chan. You missed a couple spaces around the middle, but that's it. It's a good poem. :)

I like this one Ash-chan, dearest. I think the bitterness is well expressed. It sucks to live a life like that, don't it? Well, g2g. Like this one, Ash-chan! Luv ya!Livin' in the SubZero,Tatianna Blusummers

OUCH, very deep, very painfull... very sad, very beautifull...Very well expressed... I like alot.

That was great. very powerful. i love it. bye

wow...as much as i hate to say it..that kinda reminds me a little of me:(...good though