It's awsome! I think that a bit more character developement on Asilida's part would be good. Maybe a bit more about her past? Once again the descriptions are wonderful. The way that you write reminds me of Tamora Pierce. The only thing is, Tamora Pierce doesn't make her readers wait YEARS for the next chapter! :)

Oh, I like! The story is good, setting about at a nice pace, and I love al the characters so far. I love the end part with all the singing as well! I await the next installment!

Kudos and cookies to you!

Really good, caught my attention.. I'm expecting another chapter

i really like the first paragraph. really eery and retrospective and it totally sounds old. but then that tone kinda crept into the beginning of the story, and it seemed like once the story began it should have brightened- become more youthful since it was now the younger point of view who was telling the story. and i really think you could expand on alot, here. like, tell more about each thing u mention (ie, life b4 she left, enter more dialogue, etc) rather than racing through it all. i really like it, tho. hav u ever read anything by tamora pierce?... just curious. oh- and make sure ur character doesn't just morph into a hero overnight. like, with the sword-thing. she's expecting to learn swordplay in like, 2 weeks and that is so not happening... really good, tho. ^_^