Ah, little Caprice, I do hope you've learned the harsh lesson: not everyone wants or likes "CC". The next time you see fit to "take out the red pen", make certain it's done with respect, deference, and for Allah's sake, toward someone who really cares. Sorry you felt the need to take a hiatus, but I'm not sorry for the eloquent evisceration you received due to your thoughtlessness. Zen Phoenix has been writing for over a decade and he has many fans. Have a little respect.But on a lighter note, I do think you have a certain amount of potential. Your "Nyte" character is mildly stimulating, to say the least.

Welcome back I do have to say is in order. From the first chapter of your new story (this one no doubt), I have become entranced with it and I do hope that you will get up the rest when you have the chance. Amazingly, since I have read all your other stories, including both your one shots (didn't reveiw, sorry...), everything makes perfect sence and some things are actualy made much clearer. The way you made it in the begining, the play, it actualy almost made me cry. It's like a memory that one can picture and yet see little children preform it. A great memory for the ten travelers... a wonderful memory for them. I do think that all of them, especial Sorlo ( *holds up the plushi she still has* Still got it ^_^ ), enjoyed it. I liked the way you portrayed the new threat, kinda depressing and frusterated when Korem/Sorlo couldn't really fight back. (*eye twitches* How could you do that to himm!! T-T)But this is your story and if I was in your place ( not that I could ever match your standings and chapter length...took me an entire class perriod to read it!! and hour and fifteen minutes!) I would have done the same thing. I do hope, actualy I know, that this story will be just as good as the other Dendur classics. Yes, classics. I believe this to be in the same catagory of stories that Tolkien and other great fantasy writers are in. Yes, I am comparing you to Tolkien, just in the magnatude of the world and the deepness of the characters that you only get if you read all of the stories about them. ( Personaly my favorite is the first one... classic lit about a boy becoming who he is supposed to be, Love it... umm yah.. dont tell anyone I said that... ^ ^;; ) I do hope that you get the rest up when you mean to ( Translation: UPDATE SOON!!). And I would like to applogise for my LACK in updates ( school, other story... its not that I'm lazy.. okay so I am... also the fact that I lost the hard copy... IT WAS AN ACCIDENT!!) *ahem* Anywho... LAter and Nice to see some new work by yah.( sorry that this is so long... I needed to get down my thoughts on this.. Hope this helps you Caprice!! And I loove my Sorlo plushi you gave me ^ ^ )

Wow! Great first chapter! I am really going to make sure I keep an eye out for it in the future! Only one suggestion...make shorter chapters for an easier read. Other than that, keep writing!

By the way, can anyone please read a story I have on the site. It's called The Pocketwatch. Please read and review. I am so desperate. Thank you!