Wow, very impressive chapter! I read from chapter one till chapter 8 all in one go =]!
A very nice last line too.

this is really good love it sweetheart =]

Wow, this chapter was fantastic! I like the way you use subtle details to enhance the narration. It makes for a really nice, visual read.

Update soon!

~carm~

“Like a believe love, friendship, and the unknown can kill someone.” very interesting thought. i like it. excellent chapter.

This is a great story so far! You've got wonderful characters, a creative plot, and an excellent style of writing :) Good job on this, and I can't wait for more!

~carm~

wow this is an incredible story. i really like the plot line. its intriguing. havent seen a story like it. excellent.

i like this story a lot so far. its unlike anything i've ever read. excellent.

hi
if you want ... i could be your BETA reader for future chapters
a BETA reader is someone who corects spelling and checks the story over if the writer is not confident
messege me back at with your answer
i would be glad to do it

good chapter its short but good also a but confusing but anway good work update soon

wo! awesome!! update soon i wanna find out what happens. it would be so cool to mind read. creepy guy in the bushes i would have ran the hell out of there lol ok well bi

great chapter. i like yasuo few spelling mistakes but thats ok no ones perfect

The plot is really getting good. And you have good character development. Keep it up.