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| The Un-great-ful 2005-11-28 ch 1, | abuseI think you've done a good job with this piece, but as I say to most people who try to write dark, most of the time the poems come better when they're non-rhyming ones. I don't know why, maybe it's because our sub-conscious minds try to make it more difficult to access these informations or something, but I usually find I can squeeze more woe and death into a piece if I make it non-rhyming. Maybe you could give it a try. Alan. |
| Darkgiftedchild 2005-03-20 ch 1, | abuseI really like this piece...very self-powering. Something most people don't or cannot possess. |
| behind the velvet curtain 2005-02-28 ch 1, | abuseThanks tons and tons for your reviews... and I'm very, very flattered to be on your favorites! Anyways, on the the reviewing.I understand what you're saying here I think... I like it. To me it comes across as a lot deeper than what people might see at first reading.. or maybe I'm looking to hard. I do that. Either way, I like. |