Loved the last stanza. T'was very uplifting.

This is good. The rythm really mirrors the monotony you're trying to convey, it's almost a chant. The last stanza seems like a spell to make things better, although it could be read as sarcastic, depending on the mood of the reader.

Thanks for reviewing me!

I read it the day you posted it and came back to review it today. I see that you changed it, and no it ain't so bad.

This time it does seem like The Greyer will live.

I like it. -Sarah

Depressing but great!