Not bad for 35 seconds. =D =). I liked how it flowed in its own way and the repitition of the "oh" and "Don't you take..." The first four lines are what i liked the best. Nice Job =)

*Silent Writer*

Hello Ryan, this is my first review to your poems... I think.Well, this was pretty good, my favorite part was

"Don't you take that love away,

Oh,

Don't you take that heart away..."

I enjoy emotion poems... they take my writer's block away... so thanks! lol.

Good write... and I'll look forward for more of you

Kisses,Ellen

The whole thing was great and made sense except for this one sentence. I think you might've meant something else there but that's what I'm seeing and I don't understand it. Other than that, the whole poem is awesome. It shows how you feel and I understand where the emotion comes from. Great job and keep writing. This was wonderful.