I'm sorry, but Maximus obviously pawned that sword... How could you LOSE a sword; and one in a scabbard, at that? I mean, I know Maximus is a pretty boy, but even Zelos wasn't THAT stupid... Well, at least they have acknowledged how useless they are...And Seth better be making a reappearance pretty soon, and a good one at that... So... To Centropolis!

- RobinRocks x

I really like Seth, I can't believe he goes out of the story later on. You start out making us think that he is an important character and then just get rid of him... Sorry, guess I'm kinda giving it all away too soon...Nice work establishing the setting, though, and outlining clearly Seth's resentment at being stuck polishing swords for weeks...Sucker...- RobinRocks

Yay! I'm here! Whoo-hoo! Now you shall have more than two reviews; and not ones by retards asking how to pronounce Archipelago, either...Anyway, it's a good prologue, with a nice, clear use of past-tense first-person narrative. I know that later on the story switches to third-person narrative, but this is a good technique to take us right into Quinn's mind just as he is frozen into his crystal prison. Ah, Maximus... you're so useless, no wonder you pawned your sword...- RobinRocks

Good start. I especially liked the description of the monster. Anyway, I like the story so far, and I'll continue reading it.

"It froze me in my place. I couldn’t move!"

Imho, the 'I couldn't move' is ineffective. You established the paralysis, with 'it froze me in my place', the 'I couldn't move' isn't needed.

Other than that, it's good. :)

How is 'Archipelago', is it a aah-go, ay-go sound?