It's nicely written. :) I like it a lots

I liked this. it was really well written, and avoided being repetitive, as happens with so many poems like this

Wow...I love the line 'Give me ebony porcelain'. Beautifully done, and the last line makes you feel like something in your life is about to slip away.

I think it's really good, creative and powerful like all your stuff. Keep writin for us! :) Allie