A VERY nice one for a first try. You are a natural.

I like this one. It sounds really cool.

It's very good for a first try. I know for a fact you did better than I did on my first one. I believe you could say I slaughtered the sceme because I could get thing to fit properly. ^_^

Oh short and concise. Nicely done. (though you can't really say it's your first haiku anymore, lol!) Good job annie! *hug and run*~Pont

Very nice,. I have a few tips to ooffer:

Haikus don't have to rhyme. They only have to follow the syllable rule.

You might want to say who is gazing.

Other than that, this is a great start!

~Always, saeo

Aw, it's a really beautiful haiku. Great for a first try :)

My first haiku was about a lil' pink worm but the sentence lengths were wrong. You did much better.