loved the last line.

like all the imagery, surle you htis isn't you can't be too much of a beginner at poetry surely, you must be kidin

Good poem i liked ur feeling u showed in your haiku! Im a good poet myself...-BlkGothPrincess

Oh. Pretty. Really painting a pretty scene here. Good job!~Pont

Hmm.. If you wanna learn how to do good haikus, you should try reading some Basho or other haiku masters. The cool thing about haikus is their simplicity, they focus on one image and make it beautiful.