Wow, you said you are looking to improve, but I'm not sure there is any more room for improvement. This was great! I wouldn't call myself a poet by any means, but you are a very good writer. This poem put a lot into perspective. Keep up the great work. ~ Alexz Lynn

This is excellent and really places my present trials (report cards came out today and I had some social issues with my classmates) into the correct perspective. You have a way of taking the mundane and looking at it in an entirely new way that I find inspirational. I, personally, would like to see you add to it - add another stanza or so... You certainly don't have to because it's wonderful as is, but I hate to this poem end! Another great job! ~*Mettie*~

I love the 6th line. Lighthearted, nostialgic feel overall, but that line gave it a little, um, seriousness, I guess. Very nice.

I can associate with "girls brushed their long hair." I was one of those girls before I cut it. I get the feeling of living in the school hallways, too! XD

But seriously, I like this poem. It seems to stop a little short, though. I'm left wondering a bit, wanting more elaboration.

I think I'd probably connect more with the poem if I could relate to youth being "an innocent time." Huh. Lately, everything seems to be screaming at me to write a poem on my poor, slain childhood innocence. ::sigh:: I guess I'll go get on it.

It wasnt bad. I think ill miss school some odd number of years from now myself. Keep at it, and your work will get even better. :)