Reviews for Ballad of a Drug Addict

first-casualty-of-war
2006-08-19
ch 1,

abuseI really liked this, it was very powerful. Maybe this one part you can consider changing:"He had won the first contestBut he still didn't drinkAnd still he rememberedHow he puked in the sinkThe morning after"

I just think the last line ruins the perfect rhythm you had going. Maybe you can write:"He had won the first contestBut he still didn't drinkAnd still he rememberedThe morning he puked in the sink"

Besides that I really loved it! And thank you for the review =)

strugles*n*troubles78
2005-06-18
ch 1, anon.

abusewell world this is nick the man of the story i thank the author so deeply for what she has writin it makes me think that my life might someday change and the lord knows i try nick

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