The third stanza is actually quite good and the first one isn't that bad either but it still sounds a bit monotonous. The sentence in bold print doesn't really fit to the poem itself and doesn't sum up the content either. 'Really' and 'Esthetic' sound as if you only needed a word.

I like it, nice expressions. Keep it up.

~Eternal Seraph

I could feel the depths of your love in this poem. The almost possesive phrase gave this poem a desprate feel. Like the speaker was begging for someone they cared for not to leave. But the poem holds a strong message and is written extremely well. It flowed almost like a haiku and was simly put. Straight to the point and didn't stray.

Keep up the good work. A beautiful and sweet ove poem.

!~* Noelle *~!

aw that is so sweet! keep it up!