Ryan, this is very good, the best I've seen on fictionpress. You make me want to know what each bit of symbolism means, and the way you connect one society with another is fantastic! When I first started writing I ignored rhyme scheme and form and things like that because I thought they didn't express what I was feeling enough, but now I'm starting to use it more because I can find symbolism and infuse meaning into my poetry just because of what it's rhyme scheme is and because of what half of a word gets emphasized. Just as a suggestion, maybe you could try out rhyming in a poem like this, and see if you can put even more into it. I will definately be checking back more often for updates. Great work, man

Essence of indeed the parallels of this America and that of Rome, for corruption spreads deep into the wound, bleeding forth the lies and the fools that do not understand Truth. Indeed this is too a good poem.

i like the white and green man ... and eating our sin. Its like an oxymoron of gluttony. reminds me of seven... and now i'm having visions of gwyneth paltrows head ina box... agh... i really need to stop watching that movie...

hey, what do yo uthink of spishak?it's a trifle, but i don't think anyone's read it, and the sheer madness of it's sillyness not getting to anyone is driving me nuts!

This reminded me a lot of a chess game for some odd reason. Anyway, I loved the Roman references. I've always thought about modern society and Ancient Greco-Roman times and the similarities. Good work, again. Keep writing!