You know, I would have thought that the use of their powers would draw the Solari's attentiont to them, and in their shoes, I would be a bit frightened to do so.

And the Solari have found the plane that they are on, because of it.

I like how Aharas was the first to put her power into the door. She is a brave soul indeed.

I hope that you will continue your writing of this story. It is quite entertaining, and I would like to see Aharas and Macial bury the hatchet.

I would have thought that Macial and Aharas would both make good hunters, and one rabbit split between the four is going to make for light eating indeed. Are you elves vegetarians, too?

So, there is some ominous Solari in the background and they are slowly tracking down the heroes. A shame, that.

Last chapter that I read last night. Anyway, the sense of peace was a pleasant thing. I can tell that you have put more thought to Macial's background than you did Aharas'. I guess the same can be said for the other two. I would say that Macial is most likely your favorite given that you use his name for the penname, and there are most stories brewing in your head about him. Someday I will write about Alteng, too.

Well, you made the SOlari a little softer, but I don't think that I want them to find the four heroes.

I don't know what to think about the Solari. Are they full of something or are they sincere? They seem to be a rather violent race since they killed one of their own for his failure, and they did not tell the four that their death was the price for giving up their powers.

Itinteresting the differences between the four of them. I do like how you have the bit between Macial and Aharas. They make for an interesting pair with their animousity towards each other. Tahara seems more able to communicate with Aharas than Nick does with Macial.

You do have to watch not being able to communicate with words that we are used to . . . like the bit about "miles", but still it was a nice touch that made the others more foreign.

This is a good story too...you write descriptions much better than I ever could!

Nice little mirror reflection of the chapter/characters. I tried to do that once, but I couldn't keep it up. Oh well, outside of that. You still have a neat thing going with Macial . . . I take it that Macial must be your fav because of the penname. The encounter with the elf was entertaining. I wonder if the elves could still be good guys, because Macial hasn't given any of them much of a chance.

Nick is having some troubles. Somehow I wouldn't have guessed that the library time would have been his favorite, but it works. Also I like how you keep refering to him being cold. It would be intereting if he was cold and no one else was that cold arond him. After all you refer to it being an exceptionally cold winter.

So, wwe haven't met the second girl. The sequence works well with a dream in the non-cohesiveness of moving from one place to another.

You did a nice loop with the report card thing. (So, did the grades get better for him) You seem to have one of those trainer characters, who knows something, but he isn't willing to tell everything. My character like that is bored and enjoys bating others. It can be fun to write.

Oh, and I meant to say that Mercnatile is a nice name. There is a place in downtown Cincinnati called the Mercantile Building. Been there often! Anyway, to this chapter . . .

Evil elves! How different . . . well, sort of. you have written this part in such a grey way, that the elves could be the good guys in this. I like that, because life is not a clear cut black and white.

I like how Macial is written. He seems rather real in the way you have written his fear and his grief. You have added some nice touches there. He is frightened, yet he is brave. My friend James has some weird ideas of what bravery is. My idea of bravery is being afraid of something and being able to face it down, even if you are shaking in the knees.

Anyway, I think I will be printing up a few more chapters of this one to read.

Contrary to your summary, this story seems to go along quite well. Tahara is nice character and I like how things just don't turn out for her. The description of the town was nice also. I also like how you describe the flow of the power and how she creates the salt.

wow this was pretty good 2. u really have a thing 4 "tall, thin girls w/ black hair" Again, i sense Jordan, Tolkein, or even Tamora Pierce in this. Nice job, i want to read some of ur other stories sumtime(if u have anymore..)

wow. this is another great story. i've never seen anything like this. this is the best thing i have ever read. keep it up.

Hey! Thanks for your review a while ago. I never reviewed your story in return.This was a good first chapter! It captures people instantly and keeps them reading throughout the entire chapter.Thank you for hardly any grammar or spelling issues, it's easier to read that way.Sorry it took so long to review!~AnnA~

i really like the story. its really captivating. i love how u made all the characters separate in the begginaing and then showed how they came together. the only thing i would suggest as did gert is dialogue. everytime someone new starts speaking you are supposed to start a new paragrah. it gets sort of confusing if u dont. can't wait til u update. great job!