omg, that was so beautiful... lovely in a tragic sort of way... of course, blackbird by the beatles is one of my favorite songs... hm... i wonder if that influences it? o well, beautiful job!

This was beautiful written...give you the feeling of an old english sonnet

This one is the proof I was waiting for. The proof that poems don't have to be long in order to be great! I also love to read some old english in texts, it sounds so Shakespearian...(is that a word? Oh well...)Still I loved it! p.s I'll try to read your books soon.

Another well done rhyme. You had a bit of archaism which added to the feel. Repition of the first line was good, but don't over use it. Bra've!

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Nice imagery here. Nice poem overall. Keep writing, you're good at it!

This is lovely. It seems so much happier than most of the poems I've read lately. Keep up the good work.

awesome...Great use of metaphors here. I love this.-ADD