My favorite part is:

"why does the world go aroundit seems like there is no soundwas it to be boundIssue's are not standing on solid ground"

and all of this poem ryhmes really well. It's awsome.

ANNA

The rhyme felt forced at times, don't worry so much about getting everything to rhyme, (I used to) it just really throws off the rhythmn so perhaps don't rhyme every single line, but maybe use a different rhyming scheme that fits better. *This is all just a suggestion* Keep on going!

hm..i'm glad you wrote this...it helped me with some problems i've been having lately:)..keep it up

i liked how there was a sense of confusion that was being represented. there were some really creative parts to it. I like each stanza having a different rhym to it made them feel a little seperate... like different aspets of the same problem, or something. nice job!

Henna