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| Gata De La Noche 2005-03-29 ch 3,  | abusePretty good, though it was a little confusing in some places where you forgot a verb in the sentence or confused tenses or had plural with a singular noun (and vice versa) A proofread would catch most of these things. Good chapter though. So he isn't all alone. Yay! Good Job! Later! GdlN |
| Gata De La Noche 2005-03-11 ch 2, | abuseHello. Interesting idea. Pretty good so far. But there is a problem. I understand you don't have a spell check (maybe try a different program to write, if that's possible), but sometimes the meaning becomes a little unclear because of mispellings and typos. If you can't find a spell check, maybe have someone proofread it before you put it up, or read through it yourself. I sympathize, 'cause I would be dead without spell check and my Grammar-philic friends. Great concept. INteresting character. Love the way he thinks and refuses to give up. A little polishing and this will be amazing! Waiting for More! Gata de la Noche |
| Miss Yukishiro 2005-03-11 ch 2, | abuseWhat misson? I love it! It's sad, how he knows there are no survivors, and yet he still has the sthrength to hope, just to get it crushed everytime. I can't wait to find out what hapens next, so update soon! (Maybe you can go read my Fic? Please?) JA NE! |
| Miss Yukishiro 2005-03-11 ch 1, | abuseNo! Ryu! Fight fight fight! Wow, great story idea! Ok, going to read the next chapter. Great job! Ja NE! |
| Imura 2005-03-10 ch 1, | abuseVery different. Like the next Dune. Keeping em' coming |
| Sharakinpaix 2005-03-02 ch 1, | abuseYour story concept is very good, but there are lots of grammar errors. If you improved on those, no doubt you will go far! |