Good sonnet. Well done. One typo noticed: last line should it be "in your eyes" instead of "in you eyes". Would also suggest next to last line "I there did see" might flow better than as is. Love those sonnets!

Hark...dost I here a sonnet? Shakespeare reminsicent to say the least...although yours was in language I could actually understand! I think this is just beautiful, you really brought through the idea of redemption. Nice word choice, as always:)

I have to say, you have a serious flair for poetry. I'm not a religious person, at least not in the Christian sense (so you'll forgive me if I assume that the 'Lord' you refer to is, in fact, the Greek Apollo rather than the traditional Christian god.)

But, that's a total aside, and you're bloody, bloody good at this. Have you considered publishing? Because you're good enough for it. Maybe online, first...but it's a definite possibility, for talent like yours. Well done, and keep writing!

Okay. I am not a religious person, and generally dislike sermonising or expounding of the virtues of Christ Our Lord (I do like religious music though, like Mozart's Requiem... I'm fairly musically inclined). But enough about that.

The voice in this poem was different from your usual style; it was more grounded, more personal, more ordinary, and more simple. And that made this poem really stand out, it was so *understandable*, so... within reach. The images were clear and I could really feel what you were saying. Honestly, well done.

wow. i didn't know all of this went up since the last time i read. I really like this poem. it's inspiring through all the built up despair...

*content/happy sigh*

Can one swoon of joy/feeling of serenity/happiness/being impressed/? If so, I nearly did.

Lovely, lovely, lovely. Vivid imagery, creativity, unforced rhyming... it's got it all.

I'm going to go read it again. I may have to print it out.

So beautiful , God Bless and keep writing for Jesus xxoo

WOW! This reminds me of the story when Jesus walks on water and lifts Peter up out of it and helps him walk also. This is wonderfully written with much meaning and symbolism. It flowed with grace and beauty. I just flat out love it! It's definately going in as one of my favorites! ^_^!

I was hopeing that you wouldn't mind reading and reviewing a poem of mine titled: My heaven. I would sure mean alot! Thanks!:)

Amanda