Dude! I was looking at your profile and I was like.. I hate long paragraphs too, and I love reviewing stuff that doesn't have any reviews. Most people on here seem to be the opposite. Anyway! This story was cute, it's got a moral at the end which is really good if you're writing for children. Good work =)

Great point. Lovely little fairy tale, without a happy ending. But if everything had a happy ending, life would be fair, and it's not. I very much liked this. You're going on my favorites list.

Keep writing.

I applaud loudly.

~Ana