Hi! Thanks for your review of "Xatu" a while back. Allow me to return the favor! I'll comment as I read.

1.) "I can hear what you're saying, I can see what you need." -- You want to use a semicolon, not a comma, here.

2.) " I wish I could break down everyone of those" -- This is just opinion, but I think this is one of those times where you want "every one" to be written as two separate words. "Everyone" generally refers to a person. Also, I like the symbolism in this paragraph!

3.) "Everyone sways before they break; you have yet to flinch." -- Very nice line!

4.) "you couldn’t blink back before it was too late." -- Take a look at the verb tense here. Do you mean "can't" and "is" instead?

This is a lovely poem, and I hope your friend recognized you for all your help and comfort. Sometimes we all just need a friend to sit in the rain with. And a llovely job on the writing, too. :) Keep it up! --Ruatha

That was so emotional and so sweet. Your friends are lucky to have you. Hell I'm lucky to have you and we all know it.

Its, awesome how you can feel so deeply for your friends, I love all your works... Keep Up The Good WORK!

wow that almost brings a tear to my eye. i have a similiar situation helping my friend after a lot of pain... but it wasn't due to a boyfriend or anything... but wow this is so true. your friend is very lucky to have you there for them.~apikalia