Cool vision at the end, although her sudden realization that killing is wrong seemed to come out of nowhere.

Good twist at the end, just make sure you write in complete sentences.

Revise! Read over some of your dialouge, as some of it doesn't seem very realistic.

I wasn't expecting Radcliffe there at the end, good twist. Try to vary your adjectives a little, find words more interesting than "nice" and "big."

Some of your words didn't have spaces between them, making them difficult to read. It happened a couple of times, you might want to look out for that in future chapter.s

Sucks what happened to Delilah. I'm still reading! MWA HAHAHAHAHA! Oh, Shadow Cop 2 is up.

Wow, these people after Delilah sure act fast.

Cool twist at the end. Nobody ever thought that Delilah could get out of murder charges with a plea of self-defense? Or were they worried the whole time that someone would come after Delilah for revenge, the way Radcliffe is?

The events from Leo's arrival to the end of the chapter seemed a little fast. Good development of Delilah.

Revise your work! You didn't have as many errors as some other stories by other authors do, but your story would be a lot better with a bit of proofreading.

I like your descriptions of action. Usually I don't like a lot of action sequences in stories, but these held my attention very well.

Most of your charecters seemed a little stereo-typical, and I understand that every minor charecter doesn't need to be complex, but try to avoid cliches.

I like how this story is played out. It's been a while. Atleast you updated. Nice job

Am I the only One reading? (Shifts head) This is a good story. But nice job... (Runs Away)

Wow... Delilah is in trouble now! Update soon! Oh, yea, would you check out my story? It's called, Sokato: Green Police Officer.