Hey, thanks for the review. Great poem. Way to be angsty without making me want to slit my writs. More poets should learn from you. Only thing, you spelled "fair" wrong. Unless that was some sort of intentional misspelling because of uberangst of something. I never did understand that **. Heart,Liz

I liked this very much... the use of imagery is amazing! Are you going to post any more poerty/stories soon? I would love to read them!

fareness is not a word Life knows... fareness... should not even be a word...

fare=fair^^

gr8 poem. vivid and just..WOW-ish!

whoa... you bring my spirit to life, flooding my mind with past visions... Thank you.

wow, i can relate so much to this its not even funny, have written so so many poems about what i think is really similar to this, anyway, nice imagery, i like the idea of water and drowning and tears and things, even slipping, cause thats what you do in water, anyway... i love this, shold the last word be "fair" though and not "fare"? x weasel within x

Too true. Good poem and very well put. That's what it feels like sometimes...your drowning and no one cares enough to save you from the tears...alas life isn't "fare"...you spelled it wrong...it's "fair"

Whoah... last line: "That life was never fare" made me think a *lot*! Beautiful images, Aquamoon! Huge betrayal has taken place. I'm still thinking about "fare." Does it relate to "faring upon the sea?" Traveling in general? Very well done! Keep up the good work!

Btw in case I haven't already, thank you so much for your kind review! I really appreciate the time you took to write it. Reviews (and talents!) like yours inspire others to improve their writing. Thank you so much! :)

awesome i really like this... the rhythm is great and its so pleasant to read. only thing is that i'm not sure if you mean "fair" at the end... please read some of my poems, thnx a bunch :)

write on,-Em

i think it's a good poem idea...but it seems a little forced, with the odd rhyme scheme...it might just be me, though...

I understand the concept of the poem, though it begins in a confusing manner; your opening line doesn't fit with the rest of the poem. Try 'You never cared;/(On the shore you gloat)'? And for the final lines, 'I'm sinking fast/While you (stand) and stare,/And when it's too late, I realise,/Life isn't fair.' Good one.

Nice job. I liked it. I know this is short, sweet, and simple, but hey that's how I like to do things. Good job. ~_^Ren

i love this poem. it's so awsome. i think you'd enjoy some of my stuff. um Napoli rox my sox i love her books expecialy Stones in Water. and The Darkangel awsome...yea so that's about it. Keep it up! ~love is all you need~

wow this is so sad...;_; i think on the last line you meant "fair", not "fare". anyhow, good job!

omg, thats so good! the imagery is just amazing.