what a mysterious, tense piece!talk about sucking you in.amazing work, stormer. truly amazing

Brilliant, brilliant job. You did yourself proud with this piece. It feels so real and honest - you didn't try to play with the readers by writing down trite words that invoke sympathy. Instead you performed, and you did it well!

That was very interesting! I liked how you used first person so well! I really enjoyed seeing how her mind worked. Interesting. Keep up the good work!