I liked this. Your first line was simple but strong and your descrptions were vivid despite the piece being short. The imagery of pink lace was absolutely morbid and beautiful. Tragic in a way. I liked that you didn't elaborate on who Tony and Cara were, left them to the reader to place some sort of vague persona to the names. Nicely done.
The end was especially almost certain but I loved the different interpretations that the readers get from the smoke woman's disappearance: either her loss of conciousness or her death.

I loved it.

- Twilight

Another great short story. Keep up the good work!

I... I... I think I like this! Your first line really had me going; it is very strong and you really had me in with the wounds that the girl saw as pink laces on her arm. Like the way you write, not so moved by the story itself, but the way you have written it is great. =)

Very dark, but very good.

your username sucks. the beginning is kind of suidcidal

okay...that was...strange. i guess the gir was a bit undecided (no duh!) but then the smokey lady took her life? hm, ah well. update soon and can you please either send me a review or an email when you do? i'm horrible with titles!