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Reviews For: The Beast

dooley creel 2005-09-16 ch 1,	Perhaps it is not fair going back to your earlier poems, I like many of the phrases, even the alliterative,' Resisting ravaging ruin,' veryTolkienesque. No, I have no grudge with fictionpress really, though I do like the image of the shoddy decrepit Fiction Press Hotel ( red neon sign ) dingy musty rooms, hysterical angst-ladden writers, the tap on the sink broken, incessant din of water spewing, a fetid and rust filled stream. dc
Bragi 2005-06-16 ch 1,	As always, I like the overall feel and idea behind the work and the verbage is to die for. However, "the meat is ground" sounds like a forced rhyme. I don't suggest you resort to free verse because you have excellent rhythm and vocabulary, but try to tie in those lines with the rest of the poem so they don't sound so awkward and stuck-in-there.
L'Amante di Raso 2005-03-28 ch 1,	i think you get to caught up in rhyme scheme... try free verse.
ALK214 2005-03-04 ch 1,	I like it. The language is relatively simple, and the meter is tough to work past, but essentially, I liked the congealing ideas and memories of this work. Maybe you should put some form to your poetry, but otherwise, keep writing like this. It's good stuff.