I want MORE! lol Hurry!

really good! but i dont like how lauren is so young! i think she should be at least 14 (an older friend of lizzies) please continue!

hehe, this is so funny :) she is moving pretty fast... haha lauren is way braver then i would be :p it's awesome :)

Woah, Lauren is moving a BIT fast! (Lauren's my name. Lol) It's well written and I like the plot. The only thing that's really bothering me is that they met all in one day and on the same day she's like going after him and they're almost kissing. Other than that it's really good. Update soon!

Good, good, a guy who's not too great when ecentricity heads his way. Not so off when entering a guy's psyche, sicne there are guys like this (Whittlinger's "Razzle" is a good example). Lauren is an interesting character, the voice I mentally hear is so sweet though... (And does a Barbie show actually exist?) Well, along the way you'll advance and develop more on writing as the characters do so as well. I haven't found much too critic on yet, but you'll get some the further you progress. Good Lux MQFS!-Cearius