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| The Phantom in Box 5 2005-03-05 ch 1,   | That was really, really cool! Encore! I want more! |
| Livid-In-Seclusion 2005-03-05 ch 1, | wow. creepy story. I like the ending, but maybe take out the part of when you explain that the girl is wrecking the earth. Let the audience figure it out for themselves. Also, the last three sentences kind of messed me up. Tell more on why she crumbled the paper up. Good job. |