 Vandagirl 2005-05-30 . chapter 1It doesn't suck! It was really sweet! ^_^ I loved it!
There were a few typos, and it would be helpful if you made a new paragraph everytime someone new spoke, but those little things don't ruin the story.
Once again, nice little one-shot, and... yeah. I think that's it.
~Vandagirl ^_^ |