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| Jester Joshua 2005-07-27 ch 6,   | huh...thats...depressing, but why would he become lead ordinator? Did the homeless bomb them (doubtful) Darn, i want to know who did thatP.S: Why did the sign say his exact thoughts? thats kinda weirdKeep up the good work |
| Jester Joshua 2005-07-27 ch 5, | All out war! I was waiting for this moment. This reminds me of "Day after tommorow" for some reason... maybe its that survival at all cost kinda thingAnyway, nice work |
| Jester Joshua 2005-07-27 ch 4, | YAY! that weird ordinator is dead!Question: why did noone question wether or not he said the truth?whatever, but you did well! |
| Jester Joshua 2005-07-27 ch 3, | very good...just that the homeless seem a little (just a little) to happy to go to the bears den (a.k.a the ordinator base)anyway, nice work |
| Jester Joshua 2005-07-27 ch 2, | oh...Scheming, excelent!What will happen next i wonder...Please continue! |
| Jester Joshua 2005-07-27 ch 1, | My god! Thats could be real in a hundred years, scarry thought though. Cant wait to keep reading! If you keep this up... well thanks for writing! |
| Dividend 2005-06-08 ch 4, | Another great chapter! But... more narration next time, describe things fully. That's all. |
| Dividend 2005-06-08 ch 3, | Good chapter! (a few mistakes, check it). I dunno why I'm the only one who's been reviewing. This is a very good and interesting story. :-) |
| Dividend 2005-03-18 ch 1, | WRITE MORE! Please... I've been waiting for so long,... |
| Dividend 2005-03-13 ch 2, | Good... you wrote it well, I can't wait for more! But, check chapter two for errors though. Oh, and I also liked the last part, sorta told that Tarhiel has some sort of plan against Rhys... I also liked Dante... there's this certain mystery around him... well, keep it up! |