Reviews for Sand In The Desert

Reviews For: Sand In The Desert

FuZz ZuRiFf 2005-06-29 ch 1,	this be ugly like your ugly face and your small **/
passionfruitnightmare 2005-04-17 ch 1,	HOLY CRAP. this is absolutely amazing. not confusing at all. to me at least. it got the wheels turning instead of the bile rising in my throat. its beautiful...don't scrap it. i love it. read it with my mouth wide open the entire time. actually, it could quite possibly stand on its own if you wanted it to. i am in awe.
shinco 2005-04-09 ch 1,	Wow! Hey, me again! ^_^ That was very confusing, yes, but it was AMAZINGLY WRITTEN! The emotion and imagery was WONDERFUL and the words you chose to describe what was going on were perfect! I think I can get what the man was. Was he a hater of everything so he wanted to destroy everything, and the sand made him so mad because he couldn't destroy it, so he hated the sand more than anything? ... ok, THAT confused me! lol, hey, why don't you e-mail me an explaination so I can find out if my mind has the right idea up there^! lol, hehe, I liked it, it was very well written, and I wish I could write like that. Guess I just gotta really think it through and study vocabulary! ^_^ Good idea... lol, well, I'm trying to get to your poems and reviewin' them! You're nice, so I want to be a good friend to you and review you as much as I can (even if I have to flame :(... oh, I'll always find somethin' good to say about what you write! ^_^ Ain't no way I couldn't!)! ^_^ ^_^ Well, guess I'll read the one about Bush. See ya!
theCoffeeEnzyme 2005-03-31 ch 1,	Wow, please don't get rid of this and please keep posting. You're an amazing writer (as I'm sure I've said a great number of times before) and you have real talent.
Bragi 2005-03-16 ch 1,	Possible title: "The Sandman". Although I'm not sure how this relates to the war on drugs, it is not entirely a peice to be scrapped. Perhaps you ought to clean up a bit of the excess repetition and find a few other synonyms for the words, "scream" and "rage".
Nails For Your Crucifix 2005-03-11 ch 1,	The comparison to Shelley's "Ozymandias of Egypt" was simply amazing. Far to few people know that poem. I was pleased when I saw you had posted something new. Don't care about the flamers on this site. They really don't know anything. And I forbid you from getting rid of this piece. It's far too wonderful. So descriptive and poetic. DEfinately more like verse than a stort story.
xo-lilacsxandxlolita-ox 2005-03-09 ch 1,	First off, I want to comment on the reader poll thing before going onto the actual review ^_^ 1. I don't think it's confusing, though I think some of the elements may be over some other's people's heads who are unfamiliar with some of the subject manner. 2. I like your prose, because it's unique, fresh, and original, and of course, it makes your writing style more distinct than everybody else's out there. Sometimes, I prefer to pepper my palette with purple prose, though I think that it sometimes enhances the piece, if you use purple prose effecitively in the right places. 3. Hm, well, I guess I've got a few titles in mind. You can laugh at them, though, because they're not the greatest. Heaven's RevengeMisguided UtopiaParadise's DescensionImmortality FadedDesert TombsWastelands and Desertscapes I'm sorry, I can't think of anymore. But these are what came to mind first. 4. NO. Please God, NO. This is too good to be thrown out. 5. It would be nice if you posted more of your works. Don't worry about flamers say about you. My advice is write for yourself, and not really for the audience. If you write for the audience, then you'll produce a piece that appeals to a wider group, but it won't be your best work. Now if you wrote for yourself, you will most likely produce a piece that you will personally satisfy with, and it will have more profound meaning on your reader as well. Anyway, wonderful work, as usual. I delight in reading your works, since your prose is unique and always sharply written with such lyrical eloquence, and with a morbid theme that is truly reminiscent of Ts Eliot. I think the references to some of Ts Eliot's words were well-placed, and that's what made this piece all the more effective and meaningful, especially to those who have read Ts Eliot (I only read a few of his works, though I forgot which ones). Anyway...brilliant. Extremely well-written. Please, consider getting published. I would definitely buy your works. chibichocobo
nut jab 2005-03-08 ch 1,	Sad tone, but very good, I like muchos. You shouldn't scrap unless you want to. Depends if you get anything from posting, I like reading it if that means anything.
wordsworth in a garbage can 2005-03-07 ch 1,	to answer your questions:1.) It's a bit confusing but not overly so. you gain focus more towards the end.2.) I can read it. regular prose is just boring. you tell things creatively.3.) actually, I'm not sure, so I rather not comment on this.4.) definitely not.5.) of course. your capital letter summaries will draw people in like moths to a flame.all in all, it was a good read.
twenty-second seduction 2005-03-06 ch 1,	Answers to your questions:1. Not at all.2. I think it's prose.=]3. it should be...untitled ( yes, cos i'm original like that. )4. nopee5. yes. you should. you're a great writer & such. my favorite line would have to be: 'So still he beats, and as he beats the desert he screams still, making rough and animal grooves in the sand, screaming and shouting, ranting and raving, weeping and crying and gnashing his teeth'. I think it's just so perfect & very well composed. ah. you really are a good writer.keep writing. heh
Made in U.S.A. 2005-03-06 ch 1,	I absolutly adore this! You have to continue writing it and continue posting. It's very poetic but that adds to the piece. It's a good read. Good work, good job...its good blah I have nothing interesting to say so just keep writing :D
Amelia Carr 2005-03-05 ch 1,	first, to answer your questions: 1. At times, this gets confusing, but then seems to work itself out in the end. 2. Yes. 3. Seeing as I haven't seen any titles listed, I can't help you on this one. 4. NO 5. Yes, please do! The detail and pictures you create are wonderful, and I'd like to read more, if you ever post more.

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